06-26-2015, 04:23 AM
Hello wordancer-
"wordancer" eh? Like a combo of " word + dancer" and/or "word + answer"...
I have been around the block with this one a few times, and I'm calling to done, now that I solved the "grace notes" issue. (Of course, no poem is ever done, like they say, it's just let go of).
I do appreciate your taking the time to make suggestions, a couple drafts ago I decided not to have black + crows together, because crows are black, and it would be redundant. It would also be redundant with "notes", because notes are always written in black ink on all of the music I've ever read.
I'll pass on having a type of music (blues) in the last line, because I'm talking about the sky, not a music genre. It may also create a confusing metaphor, and just doesn't sound right to me. The sound of this poem is very important.
All that said, I still appreciate you reading and commenting on this one, wordancer. ("wordancer" eh? That really is very cool).
Thanks!
... Mark
"wordancer" eh? Like a combo of " word + dancer" and/or "word + answer"...
I have been around the block with this one a few times, and I'm calling to done, now that I solved the "grace notes" issue. (Of course, no poem is ever done, like they say, it's just let go of).
I do appreciate your taking the time to make suggestions, a couple drafts ago I decided not to have black + crows together, because crows are black, and it would be redundant. It would also be redundant with "notes", because notes are always written in black ink on all of the music I've ever read.
I'll pass on having a type of music (blues) in the last line, because I'm talking about the sky, not a music genre. It may also create a confusing metaphor, and just doesn't sound right to me. The sound of this poem is very important.
All that said, I still appreciate you reading and commenting on this one, wordancer. ("wordancer" eh? That really is very cool).
Thanks!
... Mark