Cardinal

[Tiger the Lion]

Cardinal

 
I wonder
how pompous you are;
pretending to be rare
and commonly flittering away
before questions rise,
before cameras click.
 
Are you blushing behind all that red?

At first I thought this might be about the catholic church, but then I realized I was probably just reading too much into it.

I like the idea behind the poem though. I live in an area with lots of parks about, and I've seen lots of deer this summer, but they always seem to run away before I can snap a picture.

A few things you might want to think about:

I didn't like the repeat of "before", you could change one of them if you want.

I think it would read better with "beneath" than "behind" in the last line.

This is just personal preference stuff though.

WJ,

I'm struggling with the repeat of "before". I like it and I don't. This is not the first poem where I've faced that same question. 

"At first I thought this might be about the catholic church, but then I realized I was probably just reading too much into it."

Why write if no one reads into it?  I wanted to go further and I would still like "pomp" and "flittering" and "blush" to do more work by way of connotation, but it may require an expanded piece. 

Thanks for reading...
Paul