Charleston, Et Al.

[tectak]

Somber silence is bombarded by screams of pain.You begin with a difficult meter to follow so you probably won't. Dismissing all you have already forgotten about syllable counting, best for beans, you stick a pesky anapest in the middle which you will not be able to reconcile accentually. It sticks out like candle on a slag-heap.
"How could it happen?" Really? Is it that time again?....but not for want of trying you NEARLY make it with "really is (it)" and I appreciate the effort. I note that you have failed to close the quotes which tells me you are distracted.
Every night a new reason to hate...but now we are adrift on an awkward sea...where now the rhythm?
live streaming entertainment serving answers two seconds too late....a breaking wave of froth and little else. To be honest, the line itself does not really make sense. Try as I might, and I am a mighty trier, I cannot get this to "scan" without my spoken-out-loud rendition sounding like gobbledygook.

My eyes are sliced by someone else's pain.Isolated and to be honest, metaphorically inept. How does pain slice? Even if you wrote "My eyes are sliced by someone else's knife" it would be an improvement.

The rage suffocating and surrounding pretenses of peaceWhat rage? Definite articles need definite information a priori.
serves to segregate brothers left crumbling in the crease
of systems which subjugate compromise into something for sell,
while politicians move toward the center of nothing creating new circles of hell.No. You have lost me on the same ocean. You are a rhyme whore now. Let's see....er....peace... aece, beace, cease...yes....cease...I'll probably use cease, deace, feace, geace, yes....geese....no, maybe not, lease, neice....bugger. OK, change the word start...what about cease...or crease, yes...crease ...Huh? Crease?

My heart is pierced by bullets fired into peace.Pity you couldn't get geese in here. You have already used peace. Not good.

You are trying too hard. Start from a secure position. If you want rhyme, fine, but remember that rhymes work both ways. If you are trying to rhyme with orange and cannot, change orange  to Satsuma and off you go. Endless possibilities.
As for needing a rewrite it all depends on YOU. If you are happy READING THIS OUT LOUD to your milkman, enjoy. But stick it here and we'll stick it to you
Best,
tectak