06-23-2015, 10:40 PM
Hello again Riots-
Reading your reply, I would suggest against anapests at the end of this one, because of the "pedaling" effect they have: ba-da-boom, ba-da-boom, ba-da-boom. Anapests will put things in motion just as they're coming to rest. (I hope that makes sense).
I very much like your idea of changing meter so that the ending is "sectioned off", as you say. That will require establishing meter strong enough to create different sections. Just be prepared to have a meter change pointed out. I did the meter shift with a poem of mine (to indicate two voices), and got really blasted for it. That said, I believe that meter shifting can be a fantastic poetic device when it has a purpose. Just be prepared for cries against cleverness.
All in all, I really enjoy this poem, and I'm glad that you are standing back from it for a little while, before polishing it off.
Good luck, my friend!
... Mark
Reading your reply, I would suggest against anapests at the end of this one, because of the "pedaling" effect they have: ba-da-boom, ba-da-boom, ba-da-boom. Anapests will put things in motion just as they're coming to rest. (I hope that makes sense).
I very much like your idea of changing meter so that the ending is "sectioned off", as you say. That will require establishing meter strong enough to create different sections. Just be prepared to have a meter change pointed out. I did the meter shift with a poem of mine (to indicate two voices), and got really blasted for it. That said, I believe that meter shifting can be a fantastic poetic device when it has a purpose. Just be prepared for cries against cleverness.
All in all, I really enjoy this poem, and I'm glad that you are standing back from it for a little while, before polishing it off.
Good luck, my friend!
... Mark