Their Thoughts

[Magpie]

Mr. Creosote,

An interesting short piece you've got here that I'm reading as a comment on originality, I've left a couple of thoughts below.

Their Thoughts

My thoughts belong to others
I own only a subscription --- 'I own' seems to be at odds with the statement on the previous line, is 'subscription' the right word choice?
My head reproduces the past
I whisper footnotes after I speak --- This line is a good image
The great men of the past speak through me --- Is the gender of the speaker the reason for the exclusion of 'great women', if this poem is what I think it is then surely this line would include all. Also careful with the repetition of past from two lines up.
I try to hide from them
They are leather bound black and white ghosts --- I feel that this is the key to knowing who 'they' are, however my twisted mind can't help seeing that there is a perhaps unintentional 'kinky' element to this line, like a multi-racial s&m orgy - but as I say, that could just be my twisted mind.
They haunt my writing

The lack of punctuation leads me to thinking that each line is to be classed as a sentence, in which case it reads like a series of statements rather than a poem, is there a way of enabling it to flow more naturally, I feel it would help the poem a lot. It is an interesting idea, I like the possibilities within.

Cheers for the read,

Mark