06-17-2015, 09:38 PM
Paul,
I think the confusion comes from the first stanza, which does sound like a riddle. However I think the second stanza works fine and would need very little editing to work on it's own as a poem, it has a better abstract to concrete ratio than the first stanza, if that makes any sense.
I hope I haven't seen the last of those lines in that second stanza,
Mark
I think the confusion comes from the first stanza, which does sound like a riddle. However I think the second stanza works fine and would need very little editing to work on it's own as a poem, it has a better abstract to concrete ratio than the first stanza, if that makes any sense.
I hope I haven't seen the last of those lines in that second stanza,
Mark
wae aye man ye radgie