06-16-2015, 01:38 AM
Mark, I dug the edit, but I have a couple further suggestions. First, I would drop the 'Silently, gracefully.' I believe that '...vanish when you blink.'
followed by 'I practise magic' is too perfect to separate. Also, your last line could do better at connecting to the second 'I practise magic.' with something along the lines of "Neither of us will reappear.' Use the play between the magician's famous trick and death. Cheers/Chris
followed by 'I practise magic' is too perfect to separate. Also, your last line could do better at connecting to the second 'I practise magic.' with something along the lines of "Neither of us will reappear.' Use the play between the magician's famous trick and death. Cheers/Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris