Abracadabra (Original title - I am a Deer)
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(06-14-2015, 01:33 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  I am a deer.
If you want to see cows and horses
go to a field, they will greet you.
I however, will vanish when you blink.
Silently, gracefully,
I practice magic.
You are privileged to witness it.

I am a deer.
I command acres
of glorious Highland wilderness,
though sometimes at night I prefer tarmac.
I seem to appear out of thin air,
I practice magic.
Neither of us will survive.
Hey Mark. I really love this one. Simple with a twist. Two small things...
I think it is "practise" in this usage. 
And you might also consider a semicolon after "thin air". 
Fun read.
Paul
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Messages In This Thread
RE: I am a Deer - by Tiger the Lion - 06-14-2015, 01:50 AM
RE: I am a Deer - by Magpie - 06-15-2015, 04:01 AM
RE: I am a Deer - by ellajam - 06-15-2015, 02:20 PM
RE: I am a Deer - by milo - 06-15-2015, 02:41 PM
RE: I am a Deer - by Magpie - 06-15-2015, 09:00 PM
RE: I am a Deer - by ChristopherSea - 06-16-2015, 01:38 AM
RE: I am a Deer - by Magpie - 06-16-2015, 02:35 AM
RE: I am a Deer - by ChristopherSea - 06-16-2015, 03:38 AM
RE: I am a Deer - by Magpie - 06-16-2015, 06:05 AM



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