06-13-2015, 08:08 AM
This is a really solid use of analogy. "I am free", while perhaps overused is, as you say, conveying what you want it to. It's not technically a cliche as you're linking it to something specific rather than just tossing it out there as a shortcut. I'd be slightly more concerned about "miraculously", which does actually seem like a throwaway. Keeping "free" at the end of the line, perhaps you could think of another wine metaphor to build that last line up more.
It could be worse