06-13-2015, 05:33 AM
Nice poem Queen,
I can sense the emptiness in this mans mind. However it does need a bit more details, like "empty eyes that see into nothing" and then a quick moment of a past thought, disappearing as quickly as it came.
An overall good visual piece, yet lacks deeper "emotions" from the patient, who sometimes remembers what love once was, and then somehow becomes quickly forgotten.
I really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing.
Forestdawn (Goddess of the Green Grove)
I can sense the emptiness in this mans mind. However it does need a bit more details, like "empty eyes that see into nothing" and then a quick moment of a past thought, disappearing as quickly as it came.
An overall good visual piece, yet lacks deeper "emotions" from the patient, who sometimes remembers what love once was, and then somehow becomes quickly forgotten.
I really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing.
Forestdawn (Goddess of the Green Grove)