06-12-2015, 09:29 AM
"some smiles are sadder than tears" I love this line. I also like the previous commenter's slight changes. Using "although" twice, I feel you gather more interest by replacing one of them? However, this is my first critique. I really enjoyed this, and the sad nostalgia it invokes, great job.
I relish writing bad poems, if it means someday I'll write a good one.