06-11-2015, 10:44 AM
i like poems with words like shit in them this would be improved tenfold with just a bit of work on the meter. another suggestion would be to turn each verse into a limerick.
one example of how the meter could be improved [it could be improved in a shit-load of ways]
on a lone Wednesday night
when you first caught my sight
with a shit eating grin
on your roden styled chin.
the meter can be any as long as it's constants, [it can also alternate] while meter isn't everything, a poet can sometimes look like emperor without his clothes on.
one example of how the meter could be improved [it could be improved in a shit-load of ways]
on a lone Wednesday night
when you first caught my sight
with a shit eating grin
on your roden styled chin.
the meter can be any as long as it's constants, [it can also alternate] while meter isn't everything, a poet can sometimes look like emperor without his clothes on.
(06-07-2015, 09:05 AM)staciamberdawn Wrote: It was a lonely Wednesday night
when you first caught my sight.
Sporting a shit eating grin
and a Rodin sculpted chin.
Your smile coaxed swipe right.
My future muscle bound knight.
“We should get a beer.”
My shirt is only slightly sheer.
Arrive in a lowered Honda.
Tight jeans vs Anaconda.
I’m glad I didn't swipe left.
First date turned pantie theft.