06-10-2015, 12:11 AM
Mark, thanks. You are correct that the punctuation is no longer needed. (changed).
Todd, I was asking a lot from the word "bored" haha. I had it almost enjambed as "spring/bored" on a single line - but also both meanings of bored worked. A little too much going on for a 'ku.
June only gets to be summer for 10 days or so and sometimes she can be quite bold letting us know she's ready.
Thanks everyone, I think it's better now.
Paul
Todd, I was asking a lot from the word "bored" haha. I had it almost enjambed as "spring/bored" on a single line - but also both meanings of bored worked. A little too much going on for a 'ku.
June only gets to be summer for 10 days or so and sometimes she can be quite bold letting us know she's ready.
Thanks everyone, I think it's better now.
Paul