Nuns With Guns.

[Animal Riots Activist]

Simply put: it sounds like you had a very bad experience at a christian summer camp. There's a very sing-songy feel to this poem, which makes it a bit ridiculous (which I think you're definitely going for) and it's kind of a goofy read which I always think is great. However, it is somewhat lacking in subtly (also intentional, I think) and nuance, which makes for a highly predictable read. From about line 4, I didn't feel I needed to read anymore because I knew exactly what was coming (I did read it all though), and I was right. Regardless of how silly you're going for, that doesn't make for good poetry. I would suggest an inversion on your idea somewhere in the poem, or actually put the poem in Iambic pentameter. That will help the sing-songyness along, the rhyme will be significantly stronger, and it will feel a little less childish. Definitely got a good idea to work with (I too dislike religious justification of any sort), but the execution is somewhat sloppy. I was going to comment that Snarlings crit was a bit harsh, but honestly "mild critique" should not mean "be nice" necessarily.