06-08-2015, 12:34 PM
Hey all, thanks again for your comments, it seems like you all want more context so I'll be a bit more specific in the direction I'm trying to go in my next edit. Basically, the subject of this is the same person throughout the whole thing, though I don't want that to be completely apparent, just implied. In the first stanza, the italicized stuff is his thoughts (it didn't show up but "there's nothing exempt from cannibalism" should also be italics), he is the sledder in the second, and he dances w/ a viper in the 3rd. I need to find a way to make that clear and tie everything together w/o selling out.
Thanks again,
Em
Thanks again,
Em
-"You’d better tell the Captain we’ve got to land as soon as we can. This woman has to be gotten to a hospital."
--"A hospital? What is it?"
-"It’s a big building with patients, but that’s not important right now."
--"A hospital? What is it?"
-"It’s a big building with patients, but that’s not important right now."