06-06-2015, 11:07 PM
(06-06-2015, 11:57 AM)Wjames Wrote: I’ve heard the ocean through a shell,I'm a newbie here and may be in the wrong place so apologies if I am but this is a great poem, nice rhymimg and great subject matter, my only criticism is too many words, you could cut out a few to make it flow a bit better, its a great poem though and brilliant title too.
and bought perfume to breathe her smell;
but without sand between my toes
or love to bind my earthly woes,
it’s just another night spent all alone.
I’ve watched a fireplace on TV,
and kissed her pillow, tenderly;
but without flames to warm my bones
or lips to match the love I’ve shown,
it’s just another night spent all alone.

