After Depression

[jasmine+clovers]

I like the meaning you are trying to convey. Yes, one often must fight many battles when lost in the fog of depression. However, I'm not sure your poem truly conveys the depths of that struggle nor the elation when one has weathered the storm, finally able to start to rebuild and repair damaged relationships. I think that even with very little words you can still convey all of that.

Just keep thinking about your original idea and build on it