Can I PLease Love You?

[staciamberdawn]

You came to class drunk.
I know we aren’t speaking,
but you were, are, my
First.
I want to know what is wrong but...
she tells me this is normal.

This is not normal.

You got a tattoo yesterday…I’m worried.
You said you were past it, but is anyone really past it?
I’m not.
You said you didn’t like me,
like that,
but I like you, like that.
Can’t I still be worried? Can’t I still love you?
Will you ever let someone love you?

I think the first line is great, it does a lovely job at grabbing the readers attention.
"but you were, are, my
First."
I think this part is a tad awkward with the use of commas and then the dramatic pause of First. I would really suggest rewording; definitely possible to still capture that drama i assume your looking for.
Also the last line i feel is insignificant. and overall clouds the vision.
Other than that i really like where your going with everything