06-06-2015, 12:42 AM
I liked this very much. I think it was easy to understand what you were trying to say. I know some people have said they don't like the last line but I actually do.
I liked the first paragraph and liked the last line but did not like
"You said you didn’t like me,
like that,
but I like you, like that. "
I think this was already clear from everything else, maybe you could remove or replace this part? I like ending with will you ever let someone love you?
Nice job. I am new to this and only poetry experience I have is writing in my phone so please take with a grain of salt.
I liked the first paragraph and liked the last line but did not like
"You said you didn’t like me,
like that,
but I like you, like that. "
I think this was already clear from everything else, maybe you could remove or replace this part? I like ending with will you ever let someone love you?
Nice job. I am new to this and only poetry experience I have is writing in my phone so please take with a grain of salt.