Ultraviolent Deluge

[Animal Riots Activist]

Hey Brownlie and Mel,

Thanks both for your comments. Aside from the embarrassing mix ups between its and it's, I think there's just some slight tweaks to be made here, mainly in the title and the nitpicks. I think in the end, this poem will suffer from inaccessibility and nonsense (though I definitely take exception to the fact that nonsense has to be sequestered to a Caroll-ian style, Brown), but I need to make tweaks to the poem to allow the reader to more easily follow the thread. I guess what I was going for was a poem that read somewhat like a deluge, that just sort of swept you downstream and didn't care at all what you thought on the matter. I definitely like deluge in the title, but I think ultraviolent is clunky, though fits somewhat with the subject of apocalypse/cancer. I'll have to work on this one, but yalls comments have been very helpful.

Thanks again,
Em

P.s. 'noon' was derived from 'no one'.