Life of a day

[DivineMsEmm]

I think this piece is brilliant in its simplicity - however I think the last line is unnecessary.
The day reaches a climax and dies... BANG... BOOM.  Adding "into the somber evening" almost insults the death of the day.
If you're looking for the WOW factor - the piece ends at "and dies."    

I think the title works, even though it is a bit bland for the strength of the poem - there is such meat in the poem, so much meaning in such a short piece - you want a title that can stand up to the work.  

Nice job.
--Emily

The constant chattering from the backyards, 
the sidewalks, 
and the alleyways
grows tentatively along the day,
reaches climax before sunset, 
and dies
into the somber evening.