06-04-2015, 01:33 PM
I really love how you said "decent bands" because that's how my school friends and I talk about the music artists we like. Like when they actually play music at school dances that doesn't suck.
I think you should mention at least briefly more about the burnt school you mentioned in the title and the effect of it because I was left wanting more info about that and how it connected to the girl.
I loved this poem because it showed so perfectly what once knowing someone and then losing them feels like.
Saying "she could flash the firing squad" really shows how brave and amazing the girl was.
I don't really understand why the bird in the last stanza is flightless.
I liked the imagery of the fish looking through the sky and the water.
I think you should mention at least briefly more about the burnt school you mentioned in the title and the effect of it because I was left wanting more info about that and how it connected to the girl.
I loved this poem because it showed so perfectly what once knowing someone and then losing them feels like.
Saying "she could flash the firing squad" really shows how brave and amazing the girl was.
I don't really understand why the bird in the last stanza is flightless.
I liked the imagery of the fish looking through the sky and the water.