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Life of a day
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06-04-2015, 08:05 AM
I loved the delicateness of this. It sways back and forth with a lot of ease. I think it's great. One thing to add. Try to use less cliche words. Instead of "dies," perhaps, use a phrase that can fester up more thought or up the ante. Other than that, you're off to a great start. Good job!
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Life of a day - by Alexearth - 06-01-2015, 12:10 AM
RE: Life of a day - by Rederex - 06-01-2015, 05:34 PM
RE: Life of a day - by Alexearth - 06-05-2015, 11:59 PM
RE: Life of a day - by DivineMsEmm - 06-06-2015, 04:24 AM
RE: Life of a day - by reppindetroit - 06-04-2015, 08:05 AM
RE: Life of a day - by DivineMsEmm - 06-05-2015, 08:44 AM
RE: Life of a day - by Mr. Creosote - 06-09-2015, 03:45 AM
RE: Life of a day - by Alexearth - 06-09-2015, 05:24 PM
RE: Life of a day - by Mr. Creosote - 06-10-2015, 12:23 AM
RE: Life of a day - by Magpie - 06-09-2015, 05:51 PM
RE: Life of a day - by Alexearth - 06-09-2015, 06:02 PM
RE: Life of a day - by billy - 06-09-2015, 06:18 PM
RE: Life of a day - by Alexearth - 06-09-2015, 09:31 PM
RE: Life of a day - by Magpie - 06-10-2015, 12:19 AM
RE: Life of a day - by Alexearth - 06-12-2015, 07:45 PM
RE: Life of a day - by Magpie - 06-12-2015, 10:33 PM
RE: Life of a day - by Forestdawn - 06-14-2015, 06:19 AM
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