Triptych Edit #1

[Municipal Alchemist]

How do you do this formatting????? I'd really like to know, some of what I want to post plays with the page space. Looks like you've got a lot of feedback already for this edit, so I hope my thoughts don't clash with it too much, because I didn't read any of it. Fresh eyes, na mean?

Edit #1:

Triptych

A “ten times ten”
study hall
    looks like
        a sushi house
  to cannibals

Academia
         All you can eat

It’s very pretty to be
sitting on the quad
eating quadriceps
over a potbelly fire.

There’s really nothing exempt from cannibalism.

1) Rethink if the italics are really necessary. Are those two lines important enough to stand out so dramatically from the entire poem? 2) I get that "10x10" is the common theme, but I really don't get how it describes a study hall, or more exactly, what it's significance in this section is. Maybe approaching the image differently would help. The other two uses make far more sense to me.

* * *

There’s a man with two contorted hands, Don't like "there's a man." bleh. Give us action! how about "A man with two contorted hands / wrenches light from his optical computer"?
wrenching light from his optical computer.
Ten ten-key keyboards lashed to his sled, added a hyphen because grammar, lashed is brilliant
he codes marionette personas to flow out, "marionette personas" is quite a disruptive mouthful to me. Maybe "puppet personas?" that makes alliteration with "patronize" in the next line too, also not so sure about that "flow out" is the best phrase
to manage, curate, and patronize a little "and" is a little intrusive for me, but if your style wants it there, you do you
joke store inside a digital tidal wave.

* * *

a viper is heard who hears the viper??? I feel like an annoying writing prof, but I don't like the state-of-being verb here either. This is narrative, and a very tense moment! I know you can punch it up more.
as he awakens
from a night terror great personification of viper

wait, the viper woke the man up. Nevermind.

  two steps and again, this is my stylistic instinct, feel free to ignore me
  a creak in the haha our creative writing profs would flip at ending a line with "the." don't change it.
  balls of the feet

      the hardwood floor bowing i like how both uses of "bowing" can be appropriate here

ten by ten
splinter lattices rhythmically I prefer only one lattice
underneath
     
      as they both dance who is dancing? the feet? the man and the viper? this is the closing moment, there can be no confusion
      on the floor
      like vapor great simile

Good work. The first section is the closest to finished for me, barring the cursory thoughts I had. The second is getting there, I think it can be streamlined more to make the narrative and surreal images pop. I think the third is the most compelling, and the best one to conclude with. It's the right stylistic approach, your imagery is incredibly powerful for how minimalist the writing is. that said, I think it's the farthest from done. I'm confused about the antecedents of pronouns, about who's doing what. Be sure to keep the tight, controlled language as you make changes, that's what makes it so powerful. Finally, I think your overall use of the triptych is successful, there's an uneasy tone binding it all together, and the geometric theme feels very novel.