06-02-2015, 08:06 AM
thanks for the feedback guys. i wonder if impotent is one of those words which are read differently over the pond, i will take everything that was said into consideration when i edit.
as for hating to do stuff to me,.. i do love a good chart. i never get lay lie right and probably never will. the liays will be changed of course.
i want to keep the poem as is in the main but you all gave me food for thought. the punctuation is welcomed and will be followed [i try to do good punctuation but sadly it's something i can't always get to grips with.]. will look at the forced rhyme and the cliche that's in there. thanks again
as for hating to do stuff to me,.. i do love a good chart. i never get lay lie right and probably never will. the liays will be changed of course.
i want to keep the poem as is in the main but you all gave me food for thought. the punctuation is welcomed and will be followed [i try to do good punctuation but sadly it's something i can't always get to grips with.]. will look at the forced rhyme and the cliche that's in there. thanks again