closed lids

[tectak]

Closed lids

It darkens when you leave the room; in me,When you leave the room I sense a darkness fall in me,

and though the sun's light beams through latticed blind, and though the sun shines through my latticed blind
I feel a colder singularity,
that's limp and lays impotent in my mind. lies impotent on
The bottom sheet lays on the hardwood floor; lies on
it holds the tears that no one saw me shed.
I sleep with one eye  looking at the door.
and hope you'd  knock but no, the door is dead. "...looking at the door and hoped you'd knock: but no, the door is dead."   These are tidying up issues, billy, and they are subjective. Use or lose

It's hard to resurrect and shine like spring
when strings lay cut and all one's guilt ebbs out. Great but "cut strings" and "ebbing out" are not compatible. How about "when sutures snap and all one's guilt ebbs out" Just a thought.
When one is lost and can no longer bring
a friendship to the fore, except in doubt.
It's then she knocks, unlocks to sidle in
and drag me back; her warmth destroys my sin.

My god, it is good! My nits are grammatical. Simplicity of intent works for me. All my suggestions are just suggestions...have I got your mood?
Best,
tectak