In the Abandoned Garden

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Very new to poetry, but extremely open to criticism!

In the Abandoned Garden

Nameless, shapeless, faceless,
society's blood red chestnut blight.
Darkness envelopes and coddles,
even moonlight ignores his plight.

Earthy mulch smudged tatters,
neglected gazettes, rested head.  
Blanket wriggles and scuttles,
inky plume-lined feather bed.

Vacant corpse, decaying tree,
a meager voiceless hermit.
A withering rose of consciousness,
once sown amongst the vermin.

Hi,
I really like the imagery used to describe the hermit and I think that it is a highlight of the poem. If you could, like others have said, introduce the hermit sooner it would improve the poem considerably. Also, I think you are trying to be to complected in the first stanza. Remember, simple is better! Take line two for example, "society's blood red chestnut blight", the emotion comes from the words themselves rather than the way in which they are combined. I think that (blood, red, and chestnut) are actually superfluous, you could say society's blight and give the reader the same emotion. Just an opinion though, take from it what you will.