Winter Haibun

[Magpie]

Hi Todd,

Thanks for the comments, I like your thoughts regarding the first bit of prose and the passage about patterns, I will definitely think about it and see what I can come up with. I agree with all your other suggestions slight alterations in certain places, you remind me that I need to look for redundant words and phrases just as much in prose as I usually do in poetry. I think I fall into the trap sometimes of thinking that because it is prose that it doesn't need as much of the fine attention to detail as poetry does.

I have been quite pleased with this piece myself, more so due to the fact that it is a bit different to what I would usually write, so it's nice to see other peoples positive comments and thoughts on it. I don't mind at all that you've commented on this even though it's in miscellaneous, to be honest I didn't think that it belonged in any of the other forums so it was the only place I could really put it, but at the same time I was perhaps hoping for some feedback so this is much appreciated.

Thanks again,

Mark