Heels

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Dale, I think this one could really benefit from some white space and some more punctuation for guidance. I realize the poor girl is breathless and part of that is reflected in the writing, but maybe shouldn't to the point of sacrificing clarity.

Heels
 
After four days of teetering around on stilettos without a comma here you have stilettos draped in furs...
draped in furs and diamonds,
going to all the most glamorous events and parties,
rubbing elbows with A-listers,
she didn't want to look at the foot
of the bed when she awoke,
fearful she would find a crime scene.

She didn't dare try to stand by herself.
Where was that damned man  same with all the damned damns
when you needed him?
He'd certainly used her enough
(not that you could tell).

She couldn't get to her purse
where she kept her pain relievers 
and there was no damn alcohol at hand…
possibly room service
would get her the help she needed:
show some skin, hint at a promise.
She'd do anything for relief,
but no more damn heels.  
 
 
Erthona
 
©2015

Hope some of that is helpful and at least partially correct. 
Paul