05-21-2015, 06:10 AM
"She is the Starry Twins, called Gemini" sounds fairly definitive to me. I am making an executive decision and moving this to Mild Critique, as it is evident from your reply that you are not sufficiently divorced from your poem to deal with objective criticism at this time. On a small side note, you will find many discussions on various poets, including T.S. Eliot (to whom I am sure you were not comparing yourself), in Poetry Discussion. The critique forums are not intended for such questions/ Admin
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