For Her

[onepapa]

She is the Starry Twins, called Gemini,
That shine, are gazed upon:
The human eyes are fixed on them.
Should I pronounce the traits
Inherent in the Gothic gates-
The gargoyles perch and stare
With crimson, bloodshot eyes- Too many clichés: bloodshot eyes, beating heart, etc
Behind which is a beating Heart,
A bloody, scarlet, living Heart?
Its veins draw from the heav’ns;
Its arteries imbue with life
And purpose this brown sphere,
This ugly mass of dirt,
This egg-shaped rock of perfect imperfections.
It feels the burden of
A thousand watching, stony stares.
Like Gaia, sucked of soma-life
By suckling wolves of its creation.
Why live the life of she who feeds?
Unwise it was of Gaia, that Eternal Healer- This line seems stilted, consider reworking it
Better are loyal dogs in supplication
Than leeches, born for blood.
The Mother suffers for her sin.
The Heart is siphoned of its life.
The Stars are pinned on coal-black slate
And gazed at,
Scrutinized,
And used.
Perhaps love is a zero-sum game.
Or at least the nature of the hounds necessitates:
She who loves, and bares her heart I think you need some sort of punctuation at the end of this line.
Gambles.

Hematite,

You should drop the practice of using caps to start each line. Almost all modern poetry has adopted the practice of using caps only where normally required. Also, your use of hyphens seems forced and perhaps it would be better to use normal punctuation.

I like the idea of your poem but it would be better if you can eliminate the use of clichés and find fresh ways to create the image you want to project.

onepapa