Americee Nonsense
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Hi, billy, I've been enjoying this. I think by using "Americee" you set up the appropriate nonsense. Some notes for you below.


(05-15-2015, 03:27 PM)billy Wrote:  Americee Nonsense

I know I'll never write Americee;
to use, to build a sort of Shakespeare dish
I'd rather not a Yankee Speller be.

Their silly bastard words don't work for me
nor  syntax in a modern way; 'tis pish. single space after nor. Tis pish made me laugh.
I said I'd never write Americee.
I love the screwy syntax of the middle line, it suits.

With ink and quill to pen, it's plain to see yes to the quill.
my words do swim like water is to fish
but what the fuck's a Yankee spelling bee.
Maybe because you've set up inverted syntax the middle line might work, but it doesn't really for me, a stumbling block.

A lean-to with a  roof is not a lee, single space after a, and in on the next line.
an elevator's lift in  Ing-earl-ish
I know, I'll never write Americee.

To call 'the sidewalk' path I do decree,
caused me to drop my scone , it looked delish
I will not touch a Yank's Spell-checking knee.
This doesn't quite make sense, as if the decree caused you to drop the scone, maybe a comma after path instead of decree.

A steer's a cow; and keep your KFC,
and shove the quarter pounder up yer kilt/of course, kilt wrong.
I'd rather leave the Yankee Spelling be.
I will not ever write Americee.
Thanks for the read, fun and a sound ville. Congrats. Smile
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Messages In This Thread
Americee Nonsense - by billy - 05-15-2015, 03:27 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by Magpie - 05-17-2015, 07:47 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by billy - 05-18-2015, 06:14 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by Magpie - 05-19-2015, 07:01 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by ellajam - 05-18-2015, 09:29 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by billy - 05-19-2015, 05:00 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by ellajam - 05-19-2015, 08:12 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by Magpie - 05-19-2015, 10:50 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by ellajam - 05-19-2015, 11:10 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by billy - 05-20-2015, 04:51 PM
RE: Americee Nonsense - by billy - 05-28-2015, 05:17 PM



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