05-15-2015, 02:47 AM
Dale, do you think line 2 adds much? I like the break on weaknesses (just because its a great word to end the line on), but feel that it works just as well without the line. It has an excellent title, and maybe the smoothest reference to a texting culture I've seen. Beyond that question, no real issues with it.
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