Global Ignition
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(05-13-2015, 03:03 AM)Jae Mc Donnell Wrote:  Slowly, slowly, catchy monkey!
He catches fire, the house burns down
And in his wake left, ash, disaster,
andĀ smouldering lips on still laughing clowns

So why not move in?
It's a room with a view,
of the end.
No need to rent.
It's our's to sell,
Right!?
Um, I'm not quite understanding what's going on.
What are you trying to convey?
There seems to be alot going on but no meaning, context, emotion, feeling etc.
This is just my humble opinion. As a reader I am quite confused... Huh
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Messages In This Thread
Global Ignition - by Jae Mc Donnell - 05-13-2015, 03:03 AM
RE: Global Ignition - by Todd - 05-13-2015, 03:43 AM
RE: Global Ignition - by Jae Mc Donnell - 05-13-2015, 03:47 AM
RE: Global Ignition - by Jae Mc Donnell - 05-19-2015, 02:17 AM
RE: Global Ignition - by tectak - 05-13-2015, 06:11 PM
RE: Global Ignition - by mkat - 05-14-2015, 10:31 AM
RE: Global Ignition - by Erthona - 05-17-2015, 07:24 AM
RE: Global Ignition - by tectak - 05-17-2015, 05:41 PM
RE: Global Ignition - by poppoetry - 06-05-2015, 01:25 AM



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