Spiders On Drugs

[heslopian]

Is this right?

Giving innocent spiders drugs.
Studying their subsequent webs of woe. When a poem uses dramatic phrasing I think it needs an element of style (rhyme, meter, even visually striking free verse) to back it up, or it just seems clunky and pretentious, like Star Wars prequel dialogue. That sounds much harsher than I intended it to be. It's really just a passing thought
Poor little minds blown to pieces.
Who speaks up for the spiders?
Don't spiders have rights?

We must put a stop to this cruelty.
We must stand and...

Wow!!! Look what the little fella on LSD did. I really, really, really hate it when people use more than one exclamation or question mark to end a sentence. To me it looks so damned scruffy and illiterate. But I'm so anally retentive The Little Book of Calm couldn't fit up my arse, so feel free to ignore me
Hey, where can I get me some of that stuff.

Making Spiders Take Drugs.
It's Sick & It's Cruel has possible potential, it's harmless fun

A sweet comic poem, which makes me think of Spike Milligan for some reason. (Probably the abstract humour.) I enjoyed it a lot, and I think it reads almost as well without the visual accompaniment, which is always a good sign (Perhaps, though, you could do a Stevie Smith and produce a doodle to accompany your poem.)