05-11-2015, 09:01 AM
I really enjoyed this poem. I tend not to enjoy poems with little/no punctuation in, but you wrote this well enough to understand properly. I particularly like the listing 'suspected, witnessed, prepared', it almost makes me wonder if the 10 years is being used as a metaphor for a prison sentence? The lexis of forgiveness and judiciary language makes me think that. The persona feels trapped, and has felt so for the past 10 years. I may be completely wrong however hahah. One of my few criticisms would be maybe just to fully use punctuation to accentuate the structure and help add a flow to the poem, it may seem less choppy. There are also parts which slightly confused me, and seemed slightly unnecessary. "They always get lost/ to dread, rage again/ against the well within" I would recommend honing your poem down, adding punctuation, and this will make an excellent poem! Thanks for the interesting read 
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