05-09-2015, 12:51 PM
i want to say change from to of but i'm not sure enough to be emphatic about it 
the last lines tie up the short poem well. there's an envy/hurt in it, even perhaps a resignation that she fancies someone else. it does seem like the 1st person's voice is now talking to the woman unless of course he's talking to the picture. i think there's just enough ambiguity for it to work
the last lines tie up the short poem well. there's an envy/hurt in it, even perhaps a resignation that she fancies someone else. it does seem like the 1st person's voice is now talking to the woman unless of course he's talking to the picture. i think there's just enough ambiguity for it to work
(05-07-2015, 04:58 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Last Tango in Wonderland (1st edit - Dale/entwife/Todd)
I saw the pictures
from your sister’s wedding;
you in that slit red dress
like you could tango standing still.
I could hear the music;
you were looking up at him
with eyes I’ve never seen.