Last Tango in Wonderland 1.1

[just mercedes]

Last Tango in Wonderland (1st edit - Dale/entwife/Todd)

Hi Paul - I like the edit and the changed position of that music line. I wanted to cut back even further - like so-




I saw The pictures
from your sister’s wedding;
you in that slit red dress
like you could a tango standing still.
 
I could hear the music; Maybe the SC could be a comma

you were looking up at him
with eyes I’ve never seen. I like the way these lines seem to play with synesthesia






Very few words used, yet you show me a complex emotional scene. Thanks!


Last Tango in Wonderland (original)

 
I saw the pictures from your sister’s wedding;
you in that slit red dress
like you could tango standing still.
 
You were looking up at him
with eyes I’ve never seen.
 
I could hear the music.