Last Tango in Wonderland 1.1

[Tiger the Lion]

Hi Paul,

I find the title confusing. Maybe something like "New Eyes", which could act as a double entendre. I think "red slit dress" seems more natural. I'd let go of the last line, as it really doesn't advance the poem, or add anything to it. Then post this in short form/ short poetry.

Dale

Thanks Dale. I think I'm agreed with most of your thoughts I'll let it sit for a bit. How do I move this?