05-07-2015, 05:14 AM
Hi Paul,
I find the title confusing. Maybe something like "New Eyes", which could act as a double entendre. I think "red slit dress" seems more natural. I'd let go of the last line, as it really doesn't advance the poem, or add anything to it. Then post this in short form/ short poetry.
Dale
I find the title confusing. Maybe something like "New Eyes", which could act as a double entendre. I think "red slit dress" seems more natural. I'd let go of the last line, as it really doesn't advance the poem, or add anything to it. Then post this in short form/ short poetry.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.