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Hail Mary
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05-07-2015, 12:13 AM
I want the repeats to carry over to the second half. I want Mary to be either 'her' or 'you.' I want to know why you call her 'my Hail Mary.' Is she a prayer? Did someone assign her to you as penance? Is she full of grace? I want your rhyme scheme to be consistent. A poem as simple as this, about the death of someone you ferociously grieve for, should cause me to shed tears by the end. It doesn't, yet. Carry on. Leah
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RE: Hail Mary - by just mercedes - 05-06-2015, 06:02 AM
RE: Hail Mary - by tectak - 05-06-2015, 06:59 AM
RE: Hail Mary - by Leah S. - 05-07-2015, 12:13 AM
RE: Hail Mary - by Mark A Becker - 06-19-2015, 10:11 PM
RE: Hail Mary - by tectak - 06-20-2015, 02:57 AM
RE: Hail Mary - by Mark A Becker - 06-20-2015, 04:25 AM
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