05-06-2015, 06:16 AM
I liked the entries here. Most of the poems ended on a really somber note. Standouts for me were:
Milo's Circus Days, especially a really beautiful opening strophe. I always tend to identify the circus by its music and the way he did that opening just set the mood for a haunting little piece.
I liked how AJ's poem really picked up momentum in the second half and used the circus to deal with a child's disappointment and disillusionment in a parent. It became a nice frame to hang everything on.
I liked Keith's mushroomed spikes, and everything from the sawdust line down. It seemed sad like the end of childhood.
My favorite parts of Ella's and Billy's were the final stanzas.
There was more I liked clown colored vomit, men and women doused in wax. Good images, hard prompt I thought, but a lot of well put together pieces.
Milo's Circus Days, especially a really beautiful opening strophe. I always tend to identify the circus by its music and the way he did that opening just set the mood for a haunting little piece.
I liked how AJ's poem really picked up momentum in the second half and used the circus to deal with a child's disappointment and disillusionment in a parent. It became a nice frame to hang everything on.
I liked Keith's mushroomed spikes, and everything from the sawdust line down. It seemed sad like the end of childhood.
My favorite parts of Ella's and Billy's were the final stanzas.
There was more I liked clown colored vomit, men and women doused in wax. Good images, hard prompt I thought, but a lot of well put together pieces.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson