The Schism of Word and Number (Revision)

[Todd]

I like how you revised S3 (about the sun's creation) and used couplets for clarity in the middle.  What if the whole poem was in couplets?  They give the poem a nice feel where they occur.

Nice job,

Anne

Thanks for the comments Anne. I decided to do the couplets for the word section and put the number section in one strophe. It seemed to fit the feel better. We'll see how it works.

Much appreciated,

Todd