New Life, No Better

[Bunx]

Sounds in the hall,
the loud privacy of
individual crisis. Love the juxtaposition of these ideas, Maybe use this more throughout the poem.
I look out the window, the grass I haven't felt in days. This reads a little strange out loud maybe try "I looks out the window at grass I have not felt in days"
I am so extremely tired.
Exhausted.
Numb. Like the clear imagery, Give the reader I feeling of exhaustion in isolation. It may be beneficial to combine some of the last lines so you don't use two synonyms (tired and exhausted) right next to another.
"I am so exhausted, numb. 
Is seeps through my battered skin"
After a long time,
it seeps through my battered skin.
This really happened,
It happened.
It happened.
It happened. I am assuming that you are referring to a attempted sucide. You could try to elaborate in a creative way
I shake and shudder, salt crusting my cheeks.

The night I tried to die,
I got a new life. This sentence seems a bit simple as this being the biggest point in the poem maybe try and reword the idea to make it sound more significant then stating a fact.

I don't think I like this one, either. Not sure if you need the comma.

Really enjoyed the read hopefully some suggestions will come in use. I was a little confused with the setting of the poem. At first I thought it took place at a work place then a school but I think it is at a home. Anyways good start and happy writing.