Nothing Alike

[thebrokeanarchist]

(okay, so this is my first poem posted to the forum...I'm interested to hear what you guys think. This should perhaps be posted under misc., but we'll start here?)



"Nothing Alike"


A strange man passed me

on the street

he wore

    dark jeans

         tattered sneakers

              a crooked bowler

                   and your cologne.

I stopped and held my breath.

I think this is a good poem. As far as suggestion/light criticism, I agree with another poster that stranger might do well to replace 'strange man,' and I also believe that you might be able to say more with your description of the man's clothing, although it's certainly possible that that description means more to you than just filler description, in which case (by all means) leave it as is.