Nothing Alike

[just mercedes]

(okay, so this is my first poem posted to the forum...I'm interested to hear what you guys think. This should perhaps be posted under misc., but we'll start here?)

Hi and welcome - I enjoyed your moment - the power of scent to evoke memories. I've made a few notes.

"Nothing Alike"


A strange man passed me

on the street You use only two period as punctuation. I want another one here.

he wore and a capital letter for He.


    dark jeans

         tattered sneakers

              a crooked bowler

                   and your cologne. I really like all the 'k' sounds in his description.

I stopped and held my breath.

I like the way your reader is caught in that swirl of air as someone passes by. Thanks for posting.