04-28-2015, 03:38 PM
Hi Psyve,
I listened to your song, and enjoyed it. The ethereal sounding words in part 1 work well with the music. The chorus words add a contrasting clarity to the mystery of the words in the verses. I was drawn in. However, I agree with Bena. When I got to Part 2, I needed something to change in the music and because it didn't, I got bored. A suggestion would be either to keep part 1 as the song and use the words of part 2 as lyrics for a different song, or allow the music to progress in part 2 by bringing in a change of key. Hope this helps. G.
I listened to your song, and enjoyed it. The ethereal sounding words in part 1 work well with the music. The chorus words add a contrasting clarity to the mystery of the words in the verses. I was drawn in. However, I agree with Bena. When I got to Part 2, I needed something to change in the music and because it didn't, I got bored. A suggestion would be either to keep part 1 as the song and use the words of part 2 as lyrics for a different song, or allow the music to progress in part 2 by bringing in a change of key. Hope this helps. G.
