04-27-2015, 05:26 AM
Mel,
Thank you, I'll look forward to your returning to this when you are able to.
Hopefularahant,
First of all, thank you for taking the time to read this and comment.
Perhaps I should have mentioned : this is a lyric for a song, so that may explain why you think you are seeing a repetition of a whole stanza: that is the Chorus. I gather that is the bit that made sense to you and that you liked.
As regards repeating the opening lines again at the end.... that is for dramatic effect and that is a device I have used in more than one of my songs.
Apologies if this lyric came across as a little obtuse overall: I often "cloak" my lyrics to retain the privacy of what they refer to, since often my work refers to people and incidents from my life.
As regards the "odd rhyming scheme" you refer to: if you think of the 4th and 5th lines in each verse to simply be a single line , albeit longer than normal then you will find what we have here is a simple AABB rhyming scheme in the verses.
Not sure if it helps, but here is a link to the SUNG version of this song: perhaps the line length and rhyming scheme will make a little more sense.
https://soundcloud.com/psyve/appleweed
Thank you again for taking the time to listen and give feedback.
-Psyve
Thank you, I'll look forward to your returning to this when you are able to.
Hopefularahant,
First of all, thank you for taking the time to read this and comment.
Perhaps I should have mentioned : this is a lyric for a song, so that may explain why you think you are seeing a repetition of a whole stanza: that is the Chorus. I gather that is the bit that made sense to you and that you liked.
As regards repeating the opening lines again at the end.... that is for dramatic effect and that is a device I have used in more than one of my songs.
Apologies if this lyric came across as a little obtuse overall: I often "cloak" my lyrics to retain the privacy of what they refer to, since often my work refers to people and incidents from my life.
As regards the "odd rhyming scheme" you refer to: if you think of the 4th and 5th lines in each verse to simply be a single line , albeit longer than normal then you will find what we have here is a simple AABB rhyming scheme in the verses.
Not sure if it helps, but here is a link to the SUNG version of this song: perhaps the line length and rhyming scheme will make a little more sense.
https://soundcloud.com/psyve/appleweed
Thank you again for taking the time to listen and give feedback.
-Psyve