Quaking Aspen

[hopefularahant]

[Video: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YGB8zJNRpRI]

Aspen in the Fall of Summer's wane
Turn their leaves like the pages of life
Through seasons of comedy and tragedy in vain
As chapters fill with harmony and strife

But, beauty permeates their words none the less
As the wind rustles through their fires of gold
Bringing the song of the easing stressconfusing wording<<
And tides of peace roll in to take hold

Their heartwood easily with time grows soft<<
As their eyes gently age with each passing year
Their gaze ever fixed skyward aloft
Reveling in their journey of faith without fear

These golden haired children of the West well abide
With growth from the roots of one single seed
Together they shine like crowns upon a hillside
And commune as one in their time of need

If there is one lesson that the aspen teach well
It's don't hesitate to fall humbly to the ground
Don't cling to treetops, come down for a spell
And let your soul be nourished with Love all around

Let your quaking be still for a while and wait
Rest your worries beneath warm blankets of snowi get the image, but i cant help but point out that snow isnt warm
What happens to you is not up for debate<<
For His Springs shall allow your new leaves to grow

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Tried to embed a video. I'll figure it out later

First of all, i love the subject matter, and i wrote a similar poem to this one about trees and lessons we can learn from them.  Nature poems hold a special place for me, and this one is no different.  You could easily make this poem alot better with a few simple changes.  First of all, try reading it aloud.  The meter is clunky at best, and the verses never really flow together all that well.  And that takes away from the rhyme scheme you have, which doesnt really seem forced, except once or twice(i marked the lines, along with a few side comments). Also, your poem is void of any punctuation. in theory, if you write your poem without line breaks it should be gramatically correct. Here your thought never even ends with a period or pauses with a comma. The images you paint are really nice, and your word choice helps the poem along, but one or two lines just seemed confusing or odd to me.  Other than that, good poem.
Just my opinion