A Block The Strongest Man Couldn't Budge

[hopefularahant]

A Block The Strongest Man Couldn't Budge

I sat up late, irate at night.
A spark I thought would once ignite,<
my mind, a match, I threw away.
I could not think of what to write.

So I sat in the dark with a page in my mitt.<
I’d embark with my thoughts to a land far away.this line is sort of meaningless
I would fight, there’s no way that my mind would submit,
so I clutched on my pen until night turned to day.

The words would not escape my lips,
the words could not escape my wrist.

I cant really sympathize with the writers block, but i still like the poem. I love the first stanza. Aside from an almost forced rhyme with "ignite", and a funny break in the rhyme scheme, the lengths of lines and syllables flow very nicely. The second stanza lost the flow and rhythm but kept the almost forced rhyme. I would rework the second stanza, pick a rhyme scheme, and maybe rework one or two of thr lines that seem to be forced rhyme (i marked them).